Does this lead sound right?

[Gameover]

Hey guys,

I'm starting to dabble in a bit of Hairstyle production and have been analysing a few tracks... I came across the Qlimax edit of 'Atmosfearz - Release'. I'm loving the lush trance sounds on the lead build up, I decided to re-create it but can't seem to get my head around if it sounds right.

I'm not trying to re-create the sound as such, but the way the melody is laid out. The Qlimax edit has a slightly different arrangement under the melody on the build up which works amazingly well.

I'm wondering if anyone would give it a test run to point out where I am going wrong.

The tune I am talking about:
My version: https://cl.ly/ifgP
The midi if anyone would like to take a look / fix it for me : https://cl.ly/ifci

It definitely doesn't sound right in parts, thoughts?

[D-Verze]

Your missing those glide sounds in the melody which are quite defining for the original I think. Try looking up some tutorials on that