It seems like the vocal is really dry, try add some reverb and some slight delay maybe. The Kick lacks treble frequencies, sounds muddy and grainy (I like the downpitch though). The mix overall seems to be a bit muddy aswell.
I like the melody, it really fits the atmosphere really well. But I think you could do way more crazy stuff with the second climax, maybe alternate your melody, add more screeches and such, theres great potential. 3rd climax with those stabby notes is great, nice idea. Great job!
@Krip Deejay
Your sounds like the midintro screech and the mainlead are too thin, add layer, distort, EQ and such. Kick seems to be a bit weak, I like how the kick sounds though. The melody isnt my cup of tea though, because the notes dont follow a logical order sometimes which makes it sound random a bit. Also, try to fill up your track with more sounds, fx and such. Still sounds a bit empty here and there.
I'd correct NRx' feedback a bit, you dont need to look into mastering. A clean mixdown is worth 100%.
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I can hear that youve put a lot of effort in this one which is great. You've done a nice job so far, but its just not finished
@NRx
I don't like the melody that much, more variation in notes could make it more interesting. The lead could have more treble freqs, or you guys find another way to make it sound more unique.
Cant say anything negative about the other parts, the intro is soooo good! Sounds so professional! Huge one! I just feel like that the quality of the track drops a bit when it comes to the climaxes you know?
@Daniro29
First thing I noticed is the lack of percs, especially rides. the vocals are sometimes hard to understand. Your second midintro has a really nice way to drop, but it comes a bit unexpected. Work with snares there.
The way your kick pitches in the first climax feels a bit weird at first, do you really need those -"Tonlagen"- in your kick? Don't think so. Also, the drops come a bit unexpected too at the first and second climax, so I think you really gotta change that, not exactly where the kick comes in but build up the drop with snares.
Overall, like I just said, the notes the kick pitches doesnt really make that much sense, although it doesnt sound off. I guess there should be other tones the kick can pitch which will sound better.
The problem with the vocal is that shes just telling a story without any different emotions in her voice. I only use such vocals in the break for once. The content of the vocal plays no role in the track if not put in scene correctly you know? Also I wouldnt use such a long sample of the vocal, try to cut the important words/sentences. And please find a way to bring your track down to 5-6 minutes. probably no one will support a track in this length. Or do another mix where you only have the half of your midontro, with cutted break and shortened climax you know?
Enough with negativity! This track is huge! I love the kick, sounds really nicely produced. All the leads, screeches and so on sound so powerful! Its a really nice concept! The mixdown also sounds really clean. I'd love to have this one in my library when finished! Great job man! I mean I have so many points where i found something to criticise but this track man... its there for atleast 90%!
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I'll just leave this here
thanks again! I'll work on the things you said. Maybe take a break with that project and start over in the new year or something. But I'll keep you updated about it if you want 
