Like hazard said, the mixdown is not really good, and the vocal is sometimes heavily out of key. Not in the last part though, it all fits very well together there. And I really like the last part for itself actually, it has a beautiful harmonic, the rather soft kick, the melody and vocal fit perfectly together there.
Regarding the beginning, the buildup towards the drop seems to be not elegant, its rather pretty "clumsy", going from a snareloop directly into the drop and stuff. Definitely fix the harmonic in the first part of the drop in the melody and the mixdown. The kick is too far back in the mix, melody sounds really muddy and so on.
I really like the idea of the track though! You defninitely should keep working on that!
It sounds pretty empty, especially in the beginning. Try add more to the piano, some effects, delay, pads and stuff. The synth sounds a bit dry and also a bit thin, 1-2 more layers and more reverb would be the way to go I think.
Kick sounds pretty alright actually, it has a nice hearable character (which most lack nowadays). Its not really an exciting kick on the other hand.
I mean the basic structure of the break and maindrop is there. But theres still alot missing. You definitely need to add more to the buildup, you only got a clap (which sounds a bit muddy by the way) and one simple sweep. Also, in the maindrop, you can have a lot more going on in the details, its not like you just let the patterns run througfh the whole part without changing anything up you know? The beats where the kick is missing for example, just try to replace the kick instead of having a break of one beat there. Just to give an example. Mixdown seems to be ok so far, maybe the kick gets a bit smashed in the mix but that could be from soundcloud aswell.
I'm not a fan of the melody I must admit. It just doesnt get me, its definitely ok harmonic-wise and such, I just think the pause in the melody takes out the drive. I don't know, I'm not a melody expert to be honest, cant really put my finger on the problem I have with it here. Youre off to a great start if thats really your second track youve ever made! Try out more! Go crazy on the maindrops, add more stuff into it! Hope that helped!
awesome job! Like with your other datweekaz-like melody
You know what I always tell you - Finish that one! I dont think I need to tell you about the mixdown here, I reckon its just quickly thrown together.
Ok so thats my newest one together made with a friend of mine, what do you think? Not really satisfied with the midintro actually, does it work that way?